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Pay attention to the capitalization and placement and uses of different pronouns. Lemme know whatcha think!

Him.

It has received the kiss of the Devil,

Tasted the sweet stench of His breath

And replied unfaithfully

It has touched the face of God, and seen everything.

A language unspeakable

A dialect too complex

For this frivolous, blissful soul

At the mercy of such vex

A mind torn

Between desire and pride

Between what is genuine and delirium

Between Love, Passion, and hatred

And as such felicity is achieved

Through pain and triumph

She no longer remains numb

She sees into herself and beyond

She sees Him.

Feedback on this poem?abtuvurys 2005

I am a poet so I can tell you what is good and bad.. I would say that the poetry is very good. But if there is a knock, it may be a little to deep for most people to understand.

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It's different. I like it. I think.
OMG that is like somthing shakespeare would write i love them type of poems u did really well on that one good luck with your poetry!